On Friday I created two x 250 word storys as part of Janet Tronstad's Beach Party Story Challenge. The short story had to include someone coming home, letter in a glass bottle and a midnight kiss
Here is Entry 1
Valerie strolled along the beach enjoying the feel of the sand on her feet and the wind in her long wavy brown hair after five weeks in hospital these were moments to treasure. Like the day she had met Patrick though being sick in front of him before being rushed to hospital due to gall bladder complications was the best first impression, though that had not stopped him from coming and visiting her. He was a great new friend who made the last five weeks bearable. Told her to call him no matter the time and during the long nights just chatting to him had calmed her. The day before a glass bottle with the sweetest letter from him had arrived and ended with “I know we haven’t known each other long but would you consider being my girlfriend as I am in like with you.”
“Hey Beautiful you headed my way?” came a familiar baritone voice.
Valerie turned her head towards Patrick and smiled. Patrick stood in front of her waiting for her answer.
“I am in like with you and yes I’ll be your girlfriend.”
Patrick opened his arms and Valerie walked into them.
Six months later – New Years Eve 2011 11.59:50pm
Valerie gazed into Patrick’s eyes as the countdown started. The last six months had been incredible and now today their wedding day was nearly over. They were at his beach house for their week long honeymoon.
“Happy New Year Valerie!” and then Patrick kissed her.
Janet Tronstad's comments - Great tone to story. I liked that he said 'I'm in like with you' rather than 'in love with you.' And a nice happily-ever-after.
Ah, you covered it all -- from meet to marry to honeymoon. Thanks for sharing your entry with us. Good job.
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